Overall okay,

I love how you didn't use a certain tonality (or key signature) for the entire piece. Good use of accidentals.
Tempo is a different story however, and the performance, whether intentional or not, was rough.
Continue writing!

Well,

This is very unlike Hans Zimmer in my opinion!

I think the most important thing you could do is add low strings, i.e. violincello and contrabass.
In terms of brass and percussion, Hans Zimmer is huge on french horns, timpani impacts and tom-type drums. Concert tom-toms, the bass drum, octotoms, djembes and dumbeks will add a huge effect to your music, especially if you want it to sound like a movie score.

Good luck, keep writing music!

Fantastic!

I loved the orchestration, but the part when the non-orchestral percussion came in ruined it for me a bit! But obviously, it's very common to do that nowadays whilst writing for television or the like.

Thanks for sharing your music!